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The words fit together very well and it feels quite true as well, you know? I like how it can be so realistic and that... yeah, we ask ourselves the question of why this person feels sleepless, what they've done and so on.
Profound stuff, either way.
I think I must have changed just about every word in it a dozen times without changing the actual meaning by much, if anything, just because nothing seemed to fit, and, honestly, I'm still not sure if I'm entirely happy with the result. This was a really cool exercise, though, and I'm glad that your group gave me the motivation to try it, because reading some of the other entries really helped me get just how important every word should be in a literary piece, and that six words can pack as much of a punch as pages of excessive prose.
Urgh. Sorry, I really can't organise my thoughts into a coherent and adequate answer to your comment. I guess I should probably stick to the simple "Thank you, and thank you again" that's been amply proven sufficient in the past. >.<
Sometimes it is very difficult to squeeze in so much into so little.
Ah, that's fair enough.
Perhaps it'll get easier the more you try and practice?
No! It's ok. I think I get what you mean.
Naww... I like long comments myself, but... yeah, I'm not exactly the best in replying to them and stuff.
It's good, though.
^^